Friday, April 16, 2010

Mobile phones are essential for school children

Nowadays,usage of mobile phones are very important for everyone.The advancement of technology has brought for us mobile phones which have multifunction.So,it is very important to have a mobile phone for everyone today.Therefore it is agrees that mobile phones are essential for school children as it is easy to communicate with their parents,to reveal the knowledge of technology since children and it can build the confidence of children.

The most important point why mobile phone are essential for school children as it is easy for children to communicate with their parents.Sometimes,their parents are busy and they tend to forget to fetch their children at school.Therefore,by using mobile phones,children can remind their parents by sending message or calling them.Other than that,children also can update with their parents if their class will cancel or not.So,it is  easy for them to keep in touch with their parents even if their parents are busy working.As all know,today's environment is not very safe, so they can also call or message their parents if they feel uncomfortable with someone they meet.So,mobile phones are essential for school children.

As the world is approaching to 2020,the advancement of technology also change rapidly, so children also not escape from this changing.The second point which related to this statement is to reveal knowledge of technology since children.The advancement of technology also is a part of learning material that can be included in our education system.Therefore,they also want to try the advancement in technology by using mobile phones.In this case,using mobile phones among school children is like to test and feel the power of technology by themselves.Based on the above reasons, it is agree that mobile phones are essential for school children.
The third point, is to build the confidence level among school children.By using mobile phones,sometimes can make children feel independent to manage their own life.There are many problems among children as they cannot tell their parents by face to face, so with using Mobile phones they have the confidence to tell their parents as they can text and calling.There are children who are not well-performed in their study but they are very good about the technology and using mobile phones.So, this can build high confidence level inside themselves.

As a conclusions,mobile phones are essential for school children...

~this is my preparation for Writing Test MUET~
P/S:if u see any mistake plese leave your comment and correct it!!tq=)

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At April 17, 2010 at 11:06 AM , Blogger Arimi/KimiWarrior said...

Nowadays,(the) usage of mobile phone() (is) are very important for everyone.The advancement of technology has brought us mobile phone which is multi-function.So,it is very important to have a mobile phone for everyone today.Therefore it is agree(d) that mobile phone is essential for school children as it is easy to communicate with their parents,to reveal the knowledge of technology since children and it can nurture the children's confidence.

The most important point why mobile phone is essential for school children as it is easy for children to communicate with their parents. Sometimes,their parents are busy and they tend to forget to fetch their children at school.Therefore,by using mobile phones,their children can remind their parents by sending message or calling them. Other than that,they also can inform their parents if their classes are canceled or not.So,it is easy for them to keep in touch with their parents even if their parents are busy working.As all know,today's environment is not very safe, so they can also call or message their parents if they feel uncomfortable with someone they meet.So,mobile phones are essential for school children.

As the world is approaching to 2020,the advancement of technology also changes rapidly, so the children cannot be escaped from this changing.The second point is to reveal the knowledge of technology since they are small.The advancement of technology is a part of learning material that can be included in our education system.Therefore,they also want to try the advancement in technology by using mobile phone.In this case,using mobile phone among school children is just like to test and feel the improvement of the technology by themselves.Based on the above reasons, it is agreed that mobile phone is essential for school children.
The third point is to build the self-confidence level among school children. By using mobile phone,the children feel independent to manage their own life.There are many problems among children as they cannot tell their parents directly, so with the help of mobile phones, they have the confidence to tell their parents as they can text and call.There are some children who are not well-performed in their studies but they are very good in the technology.So, this can build high self-esteem level inside themselves.

As a conclusion,mobile phone is essential for school children...


Salam :

-this is my first draft of checking..
-i might be missing some of the errors, as i did check your essay at night, so drowsy Zzz (sorry)
-you need to be careful on your grammar, tenses, subject-verb agreement, singular-plural, and word choice.
-i'm still learning too, im fear if i made any mistakes in correcting your essay.. sorry if u figured it out.

Thanks :)

 

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